zhe will show up at Temple
& read from the scrolls
some accounts will say
zhe was pushed to the town’s edge
some accounts will say
when zhe read the scrolls
all that was difficult was
at last understood
some accounts will say
no one noticed zhe because
who does more than gasp
when gomer walks in
& ascends to the dais
who does more than laugh
when the prodigal still dressed
in rags believes god
to have spoken more
than words of condemnation
zhe will walk in head
high mouth full of songs
of self & celebration
of you & of love
electric of me
& of sunshine & motion
of waves oh such songs
oh such gleesome songs
Jeremy,
This one leaves me speechless!
thank you. truly.
Each one in this series leaves me craving the next one!
thank you!
I’m with Amanda on that! (gomer was a surprise)
thank you… poetry is an art of surprise. sometimes in a good way, sometimes bad. :)
I guess my comment from earlier didn’t post. You certainly have made great use of the challenge! I figure ‘zhe’ is vague, as in using Yahweh for the name of God. I will read back to see if it is clearer to me. This is both clear and dynamic.Amen to the above! My partner said, “It makes me want to write!”
thanks. zhe is a gender neutral pronoun. though i guess ze is more common?
The three parts of this poem: repetition of “zhe will” (beginning, ending), “some accounts will say”, “more than”, and songs gives form to your work. Excedllent!
again, thanks.
Dear Ones… thank you for the replies forgive my silence in responding/lack of diligence to check and reply to feedback. it is not that it is not appreciated. it’s just a tightrope walk of wondering how long this will continue… it’s strange to find myself as superstitious as a baseball player on a winning streak… but i am still shaving and changing out my delicates. :)
I love the surpassing energy of ‘zhe.’ It’s a rush of identification that blends what is human, both male and female, in the celebration of what exists. Tremendous endeavor, and I’m glad you are skilled in riding the wave!
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