“Shut up ya stupid dog!”
the man hollered in the backyard.
“You ain’t even barking at nothing.”
At least nothing he saw.
The dog was barking
at yellowed grass
that reminded him
too much of home.
Empty food bowls
and water that evaporated
before he could lick.
The dog was barking
at the barbed wire fence
and shortened chain
that always hung up his mind.
The dog was barking
at fleas
that reminded him
of teeth in his side.
The dog was barking
at his owner’s voice
that was to similiar
to a booming crowd.
The dog was barking
at fellow inmates
who one day
never got up.
The dog was barking
at the nothingness
of something
he could never
escape.
i love this!
And the owner only hear the barking as an annoyance…
If I may be allowed, I would like to offer the following: do not use passive voice (was barking). Instead use active voice (the dog barks) or(the dog barked). The change will cause your message to be more immediate if not more meaningful.
Thank you so much for the suggestion! I will definitely try it out!! :)
Do you see the thread of a dog theme? This time of year brings out the worst in us, and it is so hard on animals. Strong poem! Rudy’s suggestion is interesting. See if you like it.
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